WALT persuade other students to agree with our opinion. This is the purpose for my writing.
Success Criteria:
- I plan for a writing task
- I write a variety of sentence lengths with different sentence starters
- Give reasons with detail - use specific words
- I write most topic and high frequency words correctly.
- I use capital letters, fullstops, question marks and exclamation marks correctly.
- Use persuasive language
We Should Not Allow Pets In Our School!!
In my opinion I think no school should allow pets!
I strongly believe that your pets could get lost if you are playing with your friends and then you realise that your pet has run away from you!! Another point is you would also be wasting your learning time, if your class and you are looking for your pet. Another reason is that your pet can jump through any classroom window while you might be talking to your friends. You might not even know what classroom your pet may be in or the classroom may be locked!
Some of the kids might be allergic to pets and they could get really sick and the parents would not like their child to go to the hospital! If the kid might be allergic to pets they could also get really itchy and have really bad rashes. For example they may be learning and they could get so itchy that they could bleed?
Also kids sometimes can get distracted really fast if they like the thing that would distract them like pets. Instead of learning they could be playing with the pet the whole time or just may be looking at the pet the whole time. Finally when their teacher gives them a learning sheet to do they won’t know what to do?
You should agree with me that pets should not be allowed at school.
Hi Livy I like your persuasive writing. here is one thing to work on re-read your writing because you have a mistake in there. also you did most of your goal and your writing sounds really good and it hooked me in.
ReplyDeleteWell done Livy, Your persuasive writing was really persuasive and told me that we should not allow pets in school. The best paragraph is the third one because they might not learn because when we are older we won't know the question. The 2nd best paragraph is the 2nd one because it is true some kids can be allergic are get really itchy and start to bleed, and the 3rd best paragraph is the first one, it's true when you are talking to your friends your pet could run away into the wild and you could never see them again, say if you were in a country school and your talking to your friends your dog could run away. Your mission is to re-read because there is a mistake in there. Anyways AWESOME JOB!
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