Hello Livy I have enjoyed reading your cinquain poem because it had so much detail and it actually described what a penguin is like, you said that a Penguin is slimy and noisy because that is very true because when you listen to a penguin on the internet I am pretty sure that they would sound like what you would have searched.Also I enjoyed reading about your poem when you said that they waddle because that is very true as well because they do and that is the most common thing about penguins because that is how they walk don't they. I think that maybe something you need to work on is maybe nothing because I think that everything is very good on this poem because you have not just said that a penguin waddles because they don't just do that they do other things like eat and sleep and things like that. anyway I think that this poem is very good and that you will not need to make any changes to your writing.
Hello Livy I have enjoyed reading your cinquain poem because it had so much detail and it actually described what a penguin is like, you said that a Penguin is slimy and noisy because that is very true because when you listen to a penguin on the internet I am pretty sure that they would sound like what you would have searched.Also I enjoyed reading about your poem when you said that they waddle because that is very true as well because they do and that is the most common thing about penguins because that is how they walk don't they. I think that maybe something you need to work on is maybe nothing because I think that everything is very good on this poem because you have not just said that a penguin waddles because they don't just do that they do other things like eat and sleep and things like that. anyway I think that this poem is very good and that you will not need to make any changes to your writing.
ReplyDeleteWoah Kalae thats a very long comment. Thank you so much for all the postive things you have wrote to me. You are very nice !
DeleteI like the word waddling I wounder if I can waddle
ReplyDeleteThanks Nathan !!
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